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Document: draft-ietf-avtcore-feedback-supression-16.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20120323
IETF LC End Date: 20120326
IESG Telechat date: 20120412
Summary: Ready
Major issues: None
Minor issues: None
Nits/editorial comments:
These are about the -15 version updated to -16
- I-D name: supression -> suppression
- Abstract page 1: implosion -> explosion (things which can implode are rare :-)
- Abstract page 1: signalling -> signaling
- Toc page 2 and 9 page 12: Acknowledgement -> Acknowledgment
- Introduction page 4: RTCP is not a well known abbrev: as it is first you have
to introduce it.
- Introduction page 4: same for SSM: please introduce the abbrev
- Introduction page 4: implosion -> explosion
- Introduction page 4 and other places: e.g. -> e.g.,
- 3 page 6: ,which -> , which
- 4 page 6: missing characters/words in "the PT, FMT,length SSRC"
- 4.1 page 7: all caps in "transport layer third-party loss"
- 4.2 page 7: if the SSRC is an IPv4 address the "set to 0" is not very correct.
- 4.2 page 7: media Source -> media source
- 4.2 page 8: :32 -> : 32
- 6.1 page 9: source- specific -> source-specific
- 6.1 page 9: reason( -> reason ( & a RTCP -> an RTCP & NACK)and -> NACK) and
- 6.2 page 10: Sources(BRS) -> Sources (BRS)
- 6.2 page 10: a RTCP -> an RTCP
- 6.4 page 10: receivers. e.g., -> receivers: e.g.,
- 6.4 page 10: a RTCP -> an RTCP
- 6.5 page 11: a RTCP -> an RTCP (with a line break in the middle :-)
- 7 page 11: supression -> suppression
- 9 page 12: Acknowledgement -> Acknowledgment, VAN CAENEGEM -> van Caenegem,
Johansson S -> Johansson
- 10.2 page 14: please give the names of I-Ds
- Appendix A page 14: usually the change log is in the reverse order (?)
- A.8 page 16: ,Security -> , Security
- A.14 page 17: refereces -> references
Regards
Francis.Dupont@...
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